News Story - Graduation 2010 ~ Sonja Burke
http://sonjaburke.blogspot.com/
Review: The lead does a good job with providing a quick, basic overview of the story, including most of the 5 w's. The information is a bit crammed together, and the sentences are slightly clunky, but overall the lead does a thorough job setting up the story. It's a great idea for a story because it's highly relevant, and something most students (especially the juniors).
I am most interested in learning why this has been decided, and if it's a permenant change. Also, a confirmation that seniors will in fact not have to attend school that last week is needed.
News Story - Business Apprentice Challenge ~ Allie Johnson
http://alliejohnsonjournalism.blogspot.com/
Review: The opener is very interesting, an effective attention getter. The lead is maybe a bit too detailed right away, and there is a lot of extra information to weed through to find the 5 w's. Consider minimizing the first paragraph and moving the extra explanatory info to the second paragraph.
I'm interested in learning if the students have to negotiate with local businesses, and who gets the profit. Are there any prizes, and how much do students usually make in terms of a profit? It should be a very interesting story, and I look forward to reading the finished project, as this was something I've been wondering about.
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